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Pets are good companions
I think that pets are definitely good companions. They can be a good friend for us and make us not lonely or bored. People feel lazy and meaningless when they have nothing to do. However if there is a pet we have things to do to care them, such as feeding them of washing them, or even training them. Sometimes these might be bothering and hard, but still it's a good way to prevent passing meaningless time. Also giving them love makes people feel happy and relieved. I heard that people have hidden desire to give one-sided love to something. Love between humans is interactive and that is a natural thing, but such love can cause stress unconsciously and that cannot satisfy our desire fully. Pets help us to satisfy it. Love giving to pets is unconditional and one-sided so that it makes people feel comfortable. So pets can be very good companions to us.
I could see why you believe pets are good companions. Your writing was simple and to the point. However, it your writing could improve if you add a personal story to make your writing more interesting.
ReplyDeleteI could understand the benefits of raising pets, reading your writing. But, I think it is little bit abstractive.. you would add some examples, personal story, and sequence words/phrases to make your writing more interesting.
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