My Life Until Now
201101006 Hyung-Il Kim
I'll introduce about the big accident of my life and my hobby.
When I was 6 years old, I had a car accident. I played in front of the market and the truck driver couldn't see me. The truck pressed my right food and the driver noticed it. He wrapped my food and rode me to the hospital. Surprisingly, I didn't shouted or cried but I lost the memory after rode the truck. My parents very worried but fortunately the surgery was successful and I could walk few month later. It's a very good thing for me because I like playing soccer.
Since I was in the middle school, I like watching and playing soccer. When I was in middle school, I usually watched soccer matches on weekend. And in the high school, I played soccer almost everyday after lunch or dinner time. We ate the meal very quickly because we wanted to save eating time for soccer. It was very funny time and we could reduce stress. However, after graduate high school, it's hard to play soccer together because some of them are busy and some of them went to army. So, now I usually watch soccer matches instead of play and enjoy talking about that.
I think it was interesting that you picked one particular event in your life and somehow connected to the story about your hobby. After reading your story, what popped into my mind was whether the first line of your story was actually necessary. I think it was one of the things that Prof. Bahk-Halberg told us in class, where you could just include those details in the actual story itself rather than having a separate line for it. That was just my thought, but it's a great story overall :D
ReplyDeleteI felt that your experience is similar to me.when I was young , I was hit by a truck.Then I did not cry. because of really surprised
ReplyDeleteIn my opinion it was intersting that the accident and at the same time to give your hobby.
I really like the way you introduce yourself with two big accidents. I think it is very clever and creative way to talk about who you are. And also it appears that your introduction is very effective because I was so attracted to your writing and wanted to read more while I was choosing which writing I should comments on.
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ReplyDeleteMy life until now
When I was 6 years old, I had a big accident on my foot. I played in front of the market and the truck driver couldn't see me. The truck pressed my right food and at that time, the driver noticed it. He wrapped my bleeding food with a towel and rode me to the hospital. Surprisingly, I didn't shouted or cried but I lost the memory after rode the truck. My parents very worried about me but fortunately, the surgery was successful and I could walk few month later. It's a very good thing for me because I enjoy playing soccer.
Since I was in the middle school, I like watching and playing soccer. When I was in middle school, I usually watched soccer matches on weekend. And in the high school, I played soccer almost everyday after lunch or dinner time. We ate the meal very quickly because we wanted to save eating time for soccer. It was very funny time and we could reduce stress. However, after graduate high school, it's hard to play soccer together because some of them are busy and some of them went to army. So, now I usually watch soccer matches instead of play and enjoy talking about that.