There are the memories that I remember from my history about the most important thing in my life. I have a camera. The camera helps me remain in my memories that I don't want to forget for a long time by taking pictures. My camera is a very useful tool to me because it can take pictures of my life, make me bring vivid recollections of my memory, and help me share my stories with other people.
As time goes by, the moment will fade away and I will gradually forget the moment. But, the camera can capture a second by taking pictures. Whenever I find beautiful scenes or have pleasant times with my friends, I usually take pictures. The moment when I take pictures will never fade away because I capture the instant in my pictures.
In pictures, the past seems to be the present, because the camera can always bring me clear recollections of my memory. My camera can take vivid pictures. I find the details of my past in my pictures. For example, it is possible for me to remember who was with me, where I was and how I felt at that time in my pictures.
I like to share my stories with other people so I sometimes post the review of my memories such as trips, hiking and extraordinary experiences on my facebook. If I do type the review including pictures, the visitors do easily understand my posts more than only characters. The camera can replace the view of my eyes when I have good experiences. I'm sure that the camera helps the visitors on my facebook share my experiences.
In conclusion, I can tell people why the camera is my valuable possession. First, a camera can catch the times that I want to hold for my good memories. Second, it gives me vivid memories by taking pictures. Finally, it allows me to share my memories with other people. We can never get back our bygone time because the time only flows ahead. However, a camera can hold your time and it helps you recall your good memories.
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ReplyDeleteI think it would have been better for you to lead the essay with an your specific personal anecdote. Because the essay seems to say 'A camera is a good thing', but not about your valuable possession: camera. Rather than dealing with general characteristics of cameras, giving your own examples would grab readers' attention.
You explained why the camera is important to you in detail and I liked it. But I agree with Sanghoon. It could be much better if you explained the preciousness of your camera coupled with your personal experience not the general benefit of camera. Also this essay was about describing your possession specifically. But I don't see any detailed feature of your camera in your essay.
ReplyDeleteThere are the memories that I remember from my history about the most important thing in my life. I have a camera. The camera helps me remain in my memories that I don't want to forget for a long time by taking pictures. My camera is a very useful tool to me because it can take pictures of my life, make me bring vivid recollections of my memory, and help me share my stories with other people.
ReplyDeleteAs time goes by, the moment will fade away and I will gradually forget the moment. But, the camera can capture a second by taking pictures. Whenever I find beautiful scenes or have pleasant times with my friends, I usually take pictures. The moment when I take pictures will never fade away because I capture the instant in my pictures.
In pictures, the past seems to be the present, because the camera can always bring me clear recollections of my memory. My camera can take vivid pictures. I find the details of my past in my pictures. For example, it is possible for me to remember who was with me, where I was and how I felt at that time in my pictures.
I like to share my stories with other people so I sometimes post the review of my memories such as trips, hiking and extraordinary experiences on my facebook. If I do type the review including pictures, the visitors do easily understand my posts more than only characters. The camera can replace the view of my eyes when I have good experiences. I'm sure that the camera helps the visitors on my facebook share my experiences.
In conclusion, I can tell people why the camera is my valuable possession. First, a camera can catch the times that I want to hold for my good memories. Second, it gives me vivid memories by taking pictures. Finally, it allows me to share my memories with other people. We can never get back our bygone time because the time only flows ahead. However, a camera can hold your time and it helps you recall your good memories.
When I went to a trip with my friends, I saw my childhood, or I should cherish that day's memories, my camera helps me to recall what was for the moment. After I moved to a new house, I saw my old pictures. Then, I can recollect my childhood. So, my camera is one of my valuable possesions.