200902540 Young In, Lee
My Room.
Before I wrote here a place that I like, I will write here my favorite feeling. That is about getting some airs. It felt different by the strength of wind and the place. There are lots of place that I could feel it, the place might be seaside like Hong Kong or Sydney and mountain even in the downtown. But the place which I could feel that feeling was my room. So here I wrote about my room. When I entered in my house, I could see my room's door on the right side. And I could see windows as I enter there. Out of the windows, there are some apartments and blue sky over there. So I feel comfortable in my room. But my favorite in there is, before I wrote, I can feel the tickling by the wind. It feels really fantastic. Especially seasons like now, it could be best. After I clean or shower, I usually lie down my body on the bed, and the bed is beside on windows. So if I open the window slightly, I feel like, I'm in the air. And when the wind was rising in outside, I could feel really fresh air. And turn my head into window sides, the sky and clouds are full of my sight. Because I live on 16th floor, so it is easier to see the gorgeous sky than lower floor.
You're so lucky to have a room with a window where you could get fresh air. My room also has a window, but not much air comes in and out since there's another building right beside it. I think your paragraph would have been more interesting if you included a description of how some of the other funrnitures were arranged around the room. Anyways, good work!
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Everyone has favorite feeling. Someone likes being ticklish and someone likes floating over or stuffed. And usually they like place which helps they to get the feeling well. I have favorite feeling, too. That is about getting some airs. I really like being ticklish by the wind. It is different by the strength of wind and the place. There are lots of place that I can feel it, the place might be seaside city like beautiful night view Hong Kong or quiet tides on Sydney and a mountain full of fresh air even in the downtown.
But the place which I can get that feeling is my room. When I entered in my house, I could see my room's door on the right side. On the left side, I can see my desk and computer, also green covered chair. And in the left side’s wall, there are a lot of books in the bookshelf. And turning my head to the front, there are blue and green mixed, yielding bed. And I could see windows besides of my bed. So as I enter there I can see my bed and window. Out of the windows, there are some apartments and blue clean sky over there.
But my favorite in there is, before I wrote, I can feel the ticklish by the wind. It feels really fantastic. Especially seasons like now, it could be best. After I clean my face or shower, I usually lie down my body on the bed, and the bed is beside on windows. So if I open the window slightly, I feel like in the air. And when the wind was rising in outside, I can feel really fresh air smells like fresh carbonated water. And turn my head into window sides, the sky and clouds fulfill my sight. Because I live on 16th floor, so it is easier to see the gorgeous sky than lower floor.